There is this one high school in the middle of nowhere where a small pack of boys think they have it all. Sure, they're all young and good looking and popular but they're all very stupid. Fortunately for them, though they don't know it yet, their leader's mom makes her youngest son tag along with the group. This young boy is wise beyond his years. He might be a little nerdy and not as good looking as the rest of them, but he has amazing manners and is pure of heart.
Now, this group of good-looking boys and their nerdy little tag along have gone on many adventures but my favorite of them all was when they went to the big park in town and encountered a pack of pretty girls gossiping by the fountain.
The girls were just a little bit older than the boys and, while they gossiped, they casually checked their beautiful reflections in the pond's surface.
When the boys saw them, they stopped in their tracks with their mouths hanging open. Never before had they seen such beautiful girls!
The oldest, their leader, grouped his friends and his little brother together to go over their game plan.
"Okay guys, lets yell things at them so they look at us and notice how cool and good-looking we are!"
The idea was probably foolproof so no one objected, thought the little brother, Connor, stayed behind the group and watched.
The boys catcalled at the girls from across the park for a good while, but the girls didn't look up. Finally, the oldest girl got very annoyed and called out "we don't know you, little boys, why don't you go home to your mommies and leave us alone?"
The boys scoffed and kicked at the ground and grumbled about how dumb those girls were. Connor, who had been watching diligently the whole time, got up off the ground, brushed off his pants, and calmly walked over to the group of girls.
"Excuse me, ladies?" Connor asked politely. "I'm very sorry about how my brother and his friends acted toward you all, our mother did not raise us to act like that. I think you are all very beautiful and would love to make your acquaintance."
He spoke so elegantly and sweetly that all the girls began to fuss and coo over him. They patted his hair and gave him hugs and invited him to hang out at the park with them the next day. Some even offered to babysit sometime (they were much older than him after all).
The group of boys stared at Connor and the girls in shock.
When the girls finally released Connor and all goodbyes were exchanged, Connor skipped back to his brother and their friends.
"Dude. How did you do that?" His brother asked him.
"Come on, I'll teach you all. Those girls need dates to dances later in the year!" Connor replied happily.
From then on, little Connor was a legend that taught boys how to respect women.
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Author's Note:
The original story, Saint Comgall and the Mice, featured a wise monk, his disciples and some swans. Our story lines are pretty much the same other than the change in character's. The monk's name was Comgall but I changed it to Connor and made him a young, polite little boy. I found the original story quite funny, especially when I imagined it the way I told it! I hope y'all enjoyed!
Bibliography: Saint Comegall and the Mice. The Book of Saints and Friendly Beasts by Abbie Farwell Brown (1900).
Image Source (This is actually the fountain at the Harbor in Rockwall, Texas! My hometown!)
Hi Em,
ReplyDeleteYour story was very interesting to read. I liked how you portrayed the group’s logic behind decided to catcall the girls. Many times when I have been catcalled I have often wondered what could possibly go through the boy’s mind. I really enjoyed reading a story about young boys written from a more female perspective. I would have also liked to see more characterization of Connor. I think this would make the reader feel more empathetic toward him. The wow moment for me was when the little brother was brave enough to go against the leadership of his brother and the older boys. I wonder why his brother is not as kind as him even though they have the same mother? I wonder what would have happened if the girls would have been so put off by the boy’s catcalls that they didn’t want to give the younger by the time of day?
Hey Emily,
ReplyDeleteYour story was amazing and I really loved your interpretation of the story. Really good dialog and character detail. It was a very beautiful photo that you chose as well.
Hey Emily,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story! I like how you changed the characters to something more relatable like a "cool" group of boys and a group of "beautiful" girls. I love the idea behind it that looks can get you somewhere but brains will get you everywhere. Its what is on the inside that counts. I also really liked how you made it a younger brother that ended up talking to the girls. I am a younger brother myself so I connected with that part!
Haha I loved this story, Emily! My boyfriend's name is actually Connor too and it was really funny to imagine little him being the Connor in this story! I thought it was really cool how you showed in a clever way how rude and useless it is to catcall a girl! That unfortunately is still a big problem in our society and you definitely got the message across while still making it a cute and funny story! It is nice to see a story that emphasizes manners are much more impressive than bravado! Good job!!
ReplyDeleteHi Emily!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story “Connor: Boy Legend.” I liked how you changed the characters from the original story to groups of kids. I think this made the story line both humors and was easily relatable. You did a great job with the structure of your story and it flowed effortlessly while I was reading. I think you did you great job and I can’t wait to read what you write next!
Hey Em! I loved reading "Conner: Boy Legend"! My favorite part of your story is how you showed that catcalling a girl will not turn out the way they would think. I don't haven't heard of any girl who has actually responded to a catcall in a favorable way. It makes you feel like a piece of meat. You did a great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Emily!
ReplyDeleteYour story is quite hilarious! I can definitely imagine a group of boys doing that to a group of girls. It's like middle school all over again. And how Connor emerged from the pack and made himself a legend by being so nice and polite. That was priceless. I liked how you provided background information on what the boys thought process was before catcalling. It gives some insight on their logic.
This story is amazing. It shows that catcalling is not a good way to approach anyone, and is often perceived as rude and immature. Because Conner was polite and respectful, he was able to become friends with the girls. Great job!
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