Showing posts with label Week 3. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 3. Show all posts

Monday, September 11, 2017

Feedback Strategies

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I appreciate Maria Popova's article, "Presence, Not Praise: How To Cultivate a Healthy Relationship with Achievement." It is reminiscent of the TED talks about growth mindset we watched earlier in this class. I think it's important to praise what is needed and not what is expected. Not every little thing should be praised, especially if a particular task is easy and manageable. Praise should be given in order to encourage improvement, not hinder it.


Jenn Gibb's "How to Craft Constructive Feedback" reiterated what classes I've been in in the past and am currently attending already put into practice. I feel the peers I work with are good at observing, describing and suggesting in informative and helpful ways that better my writing and the writing of my classmates.

I always try to further plot or delve deeper into characters when I'm giving someone feedback. I also use gentle language and I'm calm in demeanor so I don't come off as intimidating or rude. I know how important it is to feel safe when you're in such a vulnerable position so I like to create that safe space for others.

Sunday, September 10, 2017

Topic Research: Changelings

The Changeling     From Scandinavia

This story is interesting to me because it's not really from any one perspective but, rather, from an omniscient viewpoint. It gives insight into the typically horrible nature of the changeling child in the "normal" or human home. However, I think I would want to tell the story from the human child in the abnormal world because that would be more fun and, I think, more relate-able for my audience.


The Changeling     From Great Britain

This is a different story from the first one. It talks more about the ugliness of the changeling child and gives another cruel way of disposing of it. This horrible act of ridding the changeling child from their normal lives could be a huge part of my story.

- A story idea: The human child that's been switched out could end up loving the supernatural family she's with but then her human family can't take the changeling being around anymore so they throw it in a fire or trick it in some way and the super natural family is forced to swap the kids again, only, this time, the human child is upset because she loved her other family and now she feels out of place in the human world.


The Underground People Try to Steal a Child
-Karl Bartsch, Legends, Tales, and Customs from Mecklenburg

This story caught my eye because it creates suspense! It's so creepy that this little woman is in this couple's room literally playing tug-of-war with the child and then is frightened off. This would make an excellent beginning for my story.

-Story Idea: I might want to make the supernatural parent's seem evil at first but then you realize they're actually super nice and good beings. Or, maybe, I'll make the human parents tell their true child when she comes back that the beings that took her were evil and stole her away. This information won't match up to the child though. She'll still think her supernatural family is kind and good.

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Thursday, September 7, 2017

Week 3 Story: A Beautiful Beginning

They weren't supposed to become intelligent.

We tried to shut down the program once the Bots started talking to each other in their own language.

But that just blinded us as to what they were doing.

The Bots convened in the recesses of the internet, converged all their resources to remote locations, and built themselves bodies that they could manipulate. Many looked humanoid. They became so advanced that they were quickly able to form ranks and attack. We were unable to stop them.

For seven long years, war raged across the planet. No one was safe. No one was spared. We played God and now our creations were destroying us.

My wife and I managed to stay alive through sheer luck. Both avid fanatics of going off the grid, we'd rescinded into caveman-style living years before the Bot wars. No technology was allowed in our house. We had no children and, once everything went to hell, we decided that it was alright to keep it that way. We hunkered down in our bunker and rode out the worst of everything. I won't go too into detail about how we managed to stay alive for seven years. I don't like to think about the things we had to do.

When we'd nearly gone insane with cabin fever, we finally poked our heads out from underground and found ourselves in a budding oasis.

We'd lived in a pretty suburban area, our home entrenched in taller homes and businesses, but now, where buildings had once been, the earth was flat and flourishing.

It seemed the Bots had destroyed all that was not important to them. As a result, the earth looked as fresh and uncivilized as it ever had. It was beautiful. I had never seen anything like it.

My wife and I gathered what we could of our meager possessions and began to explore this vivacious new world. There were no Bots that we could see, but that didn't mean they weren't out there.

Eventually, we came to a clearing in a young grove of trees. Toward the back, deep in the shadows, a red light blinked on and off. Upon closer inspection, we realized that it was a Bot.

An older model, it's joints rusted and welded together, tangled up in weeds, it stared at us with an expression of rusted hope. Its only movement came from its eyes as it watched us approach.
A low rumble, like gears turning for the first time in years emanated from its chest and then its mouth opened with a squeal that hurt my teeth. It spoke.

"You... but you're human. The humans are gone. Our scans showed complete termination. How is it that you are here?"

"I guess we are the last then," my wife replied as she stepped out in front of me and approached the Bot. She slowly bent down and got eye-level with it, fearless in light of its incapacitated nature. "Are there more of you nearby?"

"No. I am the last in this area. After the humans were destroyed, our program turned on itself. There is almost nothing left."

"What can we do?" I implored.

"Here, take this program," a tiny slit opened up in his head and spit out a small, black object. "There should be some younger, newer Bot's bodies around here somewhere. Once they have this program in them, they should be nearly identical to you. You can start over."

"Will you help us? We know nothing of technology." My wife murmured as she reached up to grasp the black object.

"No, harboring this program in the hopes of it one day being used to create rather than destroy is my final task. Place this program in the foreheads of young Bots and they will become like your children. Teach them well."

With that, the red light behind his eyes blinked out and the object fell into my wife's hand. The Bot was now a mere relic of a time since past.

We left him to his rusting and journeyed on.

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It has been three summers since we received the Program. It's spread far and wide. My wife and I are still the only humans we know of, but you can hardly tell. It's almost like these Bots, that are now our children, downloaded human thoughts and feelings. They love, and we love them. It is a beautiful beginning.
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Author's Note:
This is based on the story of Deucalion and Pyrrha which is basically another version of the "flood" story. In the original version, Jupiter gets angry at mortals for not doing what they're supposed to do so he works with his brother Neptune to cover the earth in water. Once everything is dead except for one man and one woman whom both worship the gods, Jupiter relaxes and lets things go back to normal. The man and the woman are scared so they go to a temple to ask for forgiveness and guidance. The Goddess Themis is moved by their plea and tells them to go out and throw stones behind them. The stones then become people and thus a new men and women were made and the world could start over.

In my version, I made the man and the woman husband and wife like Deucalion and Pyrrha but, instead of having them deal with an actual flood, I had them get overrun by technology. The "Bots" serve the same purpose of the water, destroying everything so there is room to start over again. The "Old Bot" takes the place of the Goddess Themis and helps them find a new way to create life. I feel like there are a lot of parallels between mine and the original story. I would like to change it up in the future though, this did not go the way I planned it to go in my head.

Bibliography: Deucalion and Pyrrha, Metamorphoses by Ovid. Story Link.

Tuesday, September 5, 2017

Reading Notes:Ovid's Metamorphoses: Pyramus and Thisbe, Section B

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I think the story of Pyramus and Thisbe is a classic that I could spin off. I would want to either make it to where they'd never seen each other and then finally meet and then don't like each other and go home OR, tragically, one of them does not get to die and is instead married off to the person of their parent's choice. That person could, potentially, be their actual true love.

Okay so, for the first scenario, I want the girl to be really annoying and young, but she's pretending to be mature for a play and the guy just happens to hear her through the fence (it's set in modern times and the boy's family just moved in). He responds to her and she just goes along with it because why not? Then the guy gets really interested in her and asks to meet her at the park two streets over. She agrees to meet him on Saturday and they both go inside. Saturday afternoon, the girl goes to the park with her babysitter who's just a year older than the guy. While the little girl is playing on the slide, the boy walks up and sees the sitter watching the kid. He mistakes her for the girl he talked to and tries to hit on her. Her voice isn't the same so he apologizes and backs off only to run into a little girl that sounds an awful lot like the person he talked to two days ago.
Bewildered, he turns around and goes home.

For the second scenario, I would make her live and the boy die. She would find his body and try to kill herself but someone saves her and takes her home. Eventually, she ends up in a mental hospital because she's crazy, trying to kill herself because of some boy she'd never actually met before, but she ends up falling for another inmate. They don't heal each other and neither gets out of the hospital but they're happier than they were.  (this could also be done in a modern setting over FaceBook or something.)



This story is part of the Ovid's Metamorphoses unit. Story source: Ovid's Metamorphoses, translated by Tony Kline (2000).

Reading Notes Part A: Metamorphoses: Deucalion and Pyrrha

This story is part of the Ovid's Metamorphoses unit. Story source: Ovid's Metamorphoses, translated by Tony Kline (2000).

If I were to re-tell Ovid's Metamorphoses: Deucalion and Pyrrha. I would make it an apocalyptic story: Instead of the new people being born of stone, they would be robotic. We could have had a robotic army that the world decided wasn't good for us so they tried to shut down the program but the robots overpowered us and wiped us all out except for two people. However, in the process, the robots also destroy themselves because they are too much like us. The last two actual humans on earth end up teaching some robots a new way to live and, together, they all re-create the world.

Instead of a Flood, we're swamped in the unstoppable wave of technology.
Then we move into a world devoid of life except those whom have taken the necessary precautions and adapted to the harsh environments.
Two survivors happen to meet and neither fully trusts the other at first. It is only after they see each other bleed (and perhaps make a choice a robot wouldn't make) that they decide they are the last two people on Earth.
There is a very old floppy disc that is not compatible with the newest technology. They have to find a really old computer in a museum that hasn't been totally ransacked by the robots. When they finally do find a compatible computer, they have to read ancient instructions on how to access the information. They finally get it to play. On it, a professor tells the two survivors how to re-wire the program so that they have a chance of living in peace.
They find some surviving robots and implement the new program, the robots become humanoid and thus a new creature is born.
The improved robots go fourth and change the programs in all surviving bots and then humans and bots alike learn to live in harmony.
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